CJ’s blog: A lesson in personification…with Tommy the Truck

 

 

As I sit down on my comfy sofa to write blogs, she welcomes me like one of Grandmum’s warm oatmeal cookies…

 

 

 

 

…cushions made with just the right amount of butter and water, taken from the oven while still soft, enveloping my posterior as if to say, “There, now. You are safe, warm and loved.”  

 

My couch; I love her so.

 

 

Whether you use one word or a whole sentence, personification (when not overdone) can make your writing relatable.

 

Most of us know the nature of people–what they are like, how they behave; but any time you apply human qualities to inanimate objects, you use personification.

 

You can achieve personification subtly; one well-placed human trait can personify your words and create a memorable image for your reader:

 

The stars winked at me as I embarked on my voyage.

I paused to listen with joy as the wind sang in my ears.

 

Stars winking? Wind singing?

 

If you’re someone who takes thing literally, you might find personification is not for you.

 

 

But don’t forget what is possible within your imagination!  

 

You have experienced the stars and the wind as inanimate elements in your daily life. Now you add a “human” trait to deepen your familiarity, and, presto!  Out comes a personification.

 

 

Similes, metaphors, and personification

Personification in the form of a word or a few words can also be considered a metaphor or a simile. In fact, some may say that all personifications are metaphors and similes, but not all metaphors and similes are personifications.

 

However, certain brands of personification do not qualify as similes, which happens when you clearly treat an inanimate object as if it were human (usually in fiction or maybe in a journal—used just for humor).

 

Tommy the Truck:  a bittersweet story of personification

 

The following posts, adapted from my Facebook page, involve the ill health and eventual passing of my pickup truck; judging from the emotional reactions, comments, and LIKEs elicited from my posts on Tommy, well, my truck may as well have been human:

 

January 7th: Downtown Springfield: Tommy had to take a ride in an ambulance to a garage for a diagnosis tomorrow.  Poor twuk has never been away from Mommy this long.

 

 

 

 

 

 

January 10th:  Tommy made it through his surgery. He is still running roughly, however. As he limps down the road, I feel his pain.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

photo 3January 20th:    Poor Tommy, my truck, had to be towed again from work last Thursday. He was in the truck hospital again and had computer board surgery. He got a used computer, but he will need to be replaced. His compression is poor. I will have to get a different vehicle in a month or so when I can afford it.

 

 

 

“Alas, poor Tommy (Yorick)! I knew him, Horatio…” (But I moved four times with all my stuff in his truck bed, and he is only a 4 cylinder.) Poor little guy. 

 

 

My Facebook status updates for Tommy were not only met with an outpouring of LIKEs and comments, but with heartfelt wishes for Tommy to “get well soon.” 

 

 

When later I announced Tommy’s poor prognosis, wishes for recovery becoming condolences, my Facebook friends didn’t disappoint:

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…Tommy had lived a full life.

 

…May he rest in peace in junkyard heaven.

 

…Maybe he just wants to take early retirement.

 

 

 

 

 

So, in my case, on Facebook, personification worked on its audience and delivered the sympathy I probably had been craving at the time.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Still skeptical about the effectiveness of personification? 

 

Let’s try an experiment.

 

Let’s remove personification from my post to a stripped-down (forgive me) version: 

 

 

My truck broke down.

 

 

And its lackluster follow-up post:  

 

 

My truck broke down, again.

 

 

How many LIKEs, comments, shares and sympathies might be warranted now?

 

I rest my case.

stock-photo-17388058-crying-african-american-female-nurseAs an aside…It’s not nice to “LIKE” something tragic, but people do it every day:

 

“My father died.”

 

Susie likes your post.  

 

Bad, bad, bad.  Be careful.

 

REMEMBER:  Use personification sparingly in writing that allows for a degree of individual flair. 

 

Be sure you stay in context, too.

 

stop sign

 

Where personification does not belong

Personification has no business poking its nose into serious reports…nor should personification butt in where scholarly writing is concerned… except possibly when writing in a style that might allow for or even reward personification (e.g. when your essay is about a genre that uses personification).

 

 

Thou shalt not commit a syntax error

Do not interject a phrase that is worded informally (meaning the same way you speak) using the syntax you developed from childhood until now.  Resist the temptation to insert your brand of poetic flair into formal writing.  If you simply cannot help yourself, do so at your peril.

 

Read up on syntax clashes and syntax errors, and you’ll find it can be quite technical.  The least you need to know: stick with one style throughout your writing.  Failing that, contact us for help with your scholarly writing.

 

And may your day be filled with all the glow of a kid with a lollipop.    

Mike’s blog: Metaphorically speaking

Metaphors, in their simplest form, are powerful tools to convey ideas that may be deep, complex or difficult to describe succinctly into a broadly understandable analogue.  

Put another way, metaphors draw a comparison between two very different things with the purpose of making a meaningful comment upon one or both of them.

Metaphor appears in many forms. They can be as short as a single sentence:

 

Art washes away from the soul the dust of everyday life.

 

Or a metaphor can be as long as an entire book, such as a novel where a man is constantly making repairs to a house that’s determined to fall apart, while struggling to hold together a broken marriage, a failed career and children on the verge of delinquency.

 

Metaphor in art

Some metaphors don’t have to be written.  A work of art is often a metaphor for an aspect of life. This is especially true of propaganda.

Consider this iconic World War II image of of a solo motorist riding with a ghostly depiction of Hitler, commissioned to encourage carpools and gasoline conservation for the war effort. 

 

Or take this image of an hourglass with melting glaciers slowly dripping onto a city as a warning about the long-term dangers of global warming.

 

These examples are heavy-handed, but they demonstrate the concept.

 

Metaphor in music

Music can be steeped in metaphor as well. Prokofiev’s Peter and the Wolf is a well-known example of this, with each character represented by a particular instrument and theme. The piece is often performed without the original narration, allowing the story to be told entirely through the movements of the symphony. This technique has become the standard for composition of modern film scores.

It has been argued that the human ability to recognize metaphor is the common basis for all art, and largely responsible for our capacity to learn.

Metaphors offer lots to the writer skilled enough to employ them wisely.  

 

But before we continue…

 

An important side note about similes and metaphors 

We’ve all had a high school English teacher who scolded us that “similes are not metaphors.” That isn’t precisely accurate. It is true that not all metaphors are similes, but similes are, in fact, a form of metaphor. However, the simile is a weak aspect of the form, because it reduces the comparison between objects to a very narrow aspect:

 

He was like a lizard, cold and dispassionate with others.

 

This sentence is fine, but an editor with a keen eye will be unimpressed and ask for a rewrite that eliminates the simile, like this:

 

The man was a lizard whose blood ran cold to compassion for others.

 

The second is a stronger sentence and imbues lizardness into the whole of his character, rather than just a particular aspect. Depending on how much time we spend with him, we can layer other lizard-like tendencies into further description of his character without having to revisit the comparison.

 

And on we go with our discussion of metaphor.

 

In his famous ballad The Highwayman (1906) , Alfred Noyes uses metaphor in the first stanza to establish mood and theme:

 

The wind was a torrent of darkness among the gusty trees.  

The moon was a ghostly galleon tossed upon cloudy seas.  

 

In these two lines alone, we know that this is not to be a happy tale.

 

Dead metaphors

Most clichés are a form of metaphor, but they’re a special, insipid member of the category known as dead metaphors. A dead metaphor is one whose meaning is understood absent of the original intent of the phrase.

Notable examples of dead metaphors include “dialing the phone number,” which is only true if you still employ a rotary phone; or the archaic “world wide web” which was the term we used to describe the internet to our parents 20 years ago. Originally evocative of how the interconnected network of networks is like a spider’s web of information, it evolved to become its own definition of the internet, before we all just decided to call it the “internet” and be done with it.

Dead metaphors don’t provide any of the benefits of a well-crafted original metaphor. Clichés are worse, because they’re simply rehashes of old, tired metaphors that have been thoroughly cleansed of all meaning.

 

Metaphor:  an insight into thinking

That brings us to the most important role metaphors play in your writing: they are your reader’s best insight into how you think. The highest goal of metaphorical language not only is to inform the object of the metaphor, but the thought process that created the comparison itself. It will reveal the author as irreverent, acerbic, brooding, melancholy, or any other possible adjective. The worst it could reveal an author to be is staid or unoriginal. Excise the tumors of static thought.

I briefly mentioned mixed metaphors in my last blog post (link back to preventable errors). Broken clichés are the easiest of these to identify:

 

He drinks like a chimney and smokes like a fish.

 

Metaphors require tact

Mixed metaphors draw a false or confused comparison, undermining the intended point and halting readers in confusion.

Like any powerful tool, metaphor is best used with tact. It’s the highlight touch on the important details: the parallel arc that examines the theme in another way. But an over-reliance on metaphorical language will frustrate your reader until they are screaming at you through the page to just spit it out already.

Obvious metaphors will similarly displease your readers. They come across as pedantic and insulting, as though you think the audience too dim to take your meaning. It is not always the easiest balance to strike, as particular audiences will have a different tolerance for them than others–a children’s novel, for example, will have more room for obvious metaphors than literary work aimed at the academic crowd.

For some more reading on the subject, author Chris Wendig has compiled a helpful, and (WARNING to parents) heartily profane, list of 25 things he feels writers should know about metaphors. He expands on many of the issues described here and discusses more key elements of how and why authors use them.

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